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12/02/2005 05:20:44 PM |
Greetings from the critique club:
First you get credit for the different take on the challenge. These images are very difficult to pull off however, a 5.8 places the effort above the average and one that was understood by the viewers. The selection of the props and their respective colors, such as shirt, tie and earring case all work well. Yet, our object is to produce an image that will exceed this good effort. The framing is good because it adds interest and keeping the face out aids in the general concept. Personally, I would have used a lighter tint for the lipstick or at least less pronounced. This is important because the image is so close in one's face that the eyes will search the telltale. As is, it is so pronounced that it hits the viewer at once. So well defined that the recipient would wack the giver across the mug.
The inclusion of the thumb would have added a needed touch so as to remove a desired item or to prevent the viewer from simply becoming hung up by looking at the bottom of the frame. A bit less saturation would remove the deep tones in the hand. Another important consideration is the following and is one I would have explored. The hand a little higher and more extended with a shallow dof and dead focus on the hands. Now, the shirt and chin would be slightly out of focus. This puts the hand right in the face of the viewer and will increase the wow factor, that is a razorsharp hand with the real story behind in the fuzzy background. To focus on the lipstick works, but you are leading the viewer too quickly.
Outside of this, I believe you did a wonderful job and all you need do is pay special attention to everything that you frame. I also suggest making extra takes with different focus, lighting etc. Good luck. |
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11/27/2005 08:56:49 PM |
| good one for the challenge |
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11/23/2005 06:38:55 PM |
Made me smile.
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Good luck
kev |
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11/23/2005 05:46:07 PM |
| i like the fact that the viewer's attention is drawn to the in-focus lipstic as opposed to the slightly out of focus earrings. nice job! |
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11/22/2005 10:42:23 PM |
| great subject for the challenge |
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11/21/2005 07:35:54 PM |
| not sure what "happy birthday" has to do with a cheating husband? Probably "Honey ...sorry I was late...I had to work late at the office" would have been better. Great picture...wish he shaved. |
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11/21/2005 06:22:32 PM |
| Hand is to solid. Hands are so difficult... I like the concept.... |
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11/21/2005 01:41:21 PM |
| Tee heee. . . .this is funny -- good thing the face isn't showing -- I'd want to punch it :) Very creatively done. Great composition! |
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11/21/2005 01:41:59 AM |
| hard to decide where to put the focus in this one, isn't it? It's an image that works really well. I like it. |
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