She's Leaving Home
by Beetle

Comment:
Critique Club

Hi my name is Kari from the critique club.

First impression
Wow, I read the lyrics which are in the comments you have received .. what a lovely image you have created using them.

Subject
You meet the challenge so well ... and I don't really know any of their songs .. well not the non-popular ones.

Composition
I think that overall this is done well ... my issue is with the actual bedend .. it really didn't need to be there to complete the shot and only really became a distracting feature from the girl (who I missed at first look) .... the girls body plays well on the thirds line, with the bedend being on the other vertical line.

Technicals
I really think that you have thought this through really well. The DOF gives the impression that this is a dreamy kind of scene without allowing it to be a dream in itself. I really like that the bed is outside the DOF ... and that the note itself can be read.

Improving the score
Think about everything in the shot .. down to the nth degree .. to ensure that the right elements are there, and that those which only cause destraction are removed. This will always see you right .. .It is like my partner keeps drumming into me background background background .. for this shot it is foreground foreground foregrounds.

Final words
I think you have done great to create this image in the way that you have ... you have a fantastic portfolio ... keep it up.

Any comments on the critique feel free to PM me.

Regards

Kari

Sgt. Pepper's Lonely Hearts Club Band
by shneal13

Comment:
Critique club

Hi my name is Kari from the critique club[/b]

First impression
What a bright and vivacious shot.

Subject
This definately meets the challenge, even I have heard of this song.

Compositon
This is the area I think that could really do with some improvement. The angle that the shot is taken is not that interesting- from the perspective that if taken from the front there would be faces and more to keep the interest of the viewer. I know that this may not have been possible - so this is well done with the shot you have taken.

Also, this is a large group of people if you had been able to alter the DOF to focus on just one or two this may also have helped the viewer to focus in on the shot.

Technicals
I think that working the DOF may have helped .. This shot is also quite dark - by altering the brightness up slightly this may have given a less dark impression - another way is by working the curves to slightly being up the lightness in the shot.

Also, since they are obviously playing that would account for the slightly soft focus which is fine.

Improving the score
Above there are a number of suggestions .. even have a go with the orginal shot through the editing that you are able to do to achieve some of these changes ... and see how that makes the shot improve.

[b]Final words[\b]
I like what you were trying to achieve and think that you were most the way there. Good work.

Any questions on the critique feel free to PM me.

Regards

Kari

The Great Expectation
by Photopromo

Comment:
Hi

I am Kari from the critique club.

First Impression
I think that this is a lovely and delicate shot, which really does enhance the persons stage of life and pregnancy.

Subject
This meets the challenge and does so well, you can see how the single light source just plays along the shape of this lady.

Composition
This is fantastic .. I don't know how to improve. You have a picture that not only works the thirds lines o nthe vertical where the lady is sitting, but creates a line through behind the model and maintains the interest through the continuation of the netting.

Technicals
My only issue is one that has been bought up in your comments, and that is the area in the left hand courner from the light you used. This may have been caused through having the light source too close to the background ... so just having a slight space there may have helped. I had something similar on one of my shots and playing with the curves and contrast helped this, but I am not sure it would benefit the whole picture.

improving the score
There really wasn't a lot in the scoring but I think you may have scored higher without that area on the left which several people have found distracting. I am not sure what else I can offer.

Final words
I think that this is a fantastic shot .. and shows that you have a superb eye. I am sure there are many fantastic shots to come. Well done.

If you have any comments on the critque feel free to PM me.

Regards

Kari

Improving the score

Light Green
by max90034

Comment:
Gorgeous model .. lovely pose ... and so cute in green.

The Color of Money
by Claya

Comment:
The colour of the american money really doesn't look that green ... now the aussie money ... they have fantastic colours .. and the kiwi $20 .. truely green :)

little green umbrella
by quackquack

Comment:
This is a really small picture, and would benefit from having the size maximised to 640 on the long side, this would increase the impact of the image.

53918651.DSC_6035sw.jpg
by Anastasia

Comment:
I really think this image is gret ... I think I would have preferred if the models had actually mirrored each other than do their own pose .. I think that may have taken it to a different level.

running over the same old ground
by fandymaye

Comment:
This is a small picture, and would benefit from having the size maximised to 640 on the long side, this would increase the impact of the image.

Unfurled.......
by sailjo

Comment:
This is a small image, maximising to 640 on the long side would really help this image with creating a better impact for the viewer.

Lazy St.
by siexhasxADD

Comment:
This is a really small image, maximising to 640 on the long side would really help this image with creating a better impact for the viewer.