hanging on the edge of soberity
by dtouch1

Comment by ellamay:
Greeting and happy new year from the critique club. Your title here is what rescues this shot. It certainly makes you think not only subject but photographer had one too many. Here's my critique hope it helps...first of all this is not a flattering shot of your main girl (tho she does look drunk). There is a lot of 'stuff' in the background, the doorframe the white door, this extra hand attached to no body, the balloons? on the top. I think you could of improved this shot by doing a much closer crop to start. And perhaps be adding the hand only person. The lighting here is also blasée (indoor light is usually bad unless studio lighting of some sort). I try to stay away from it when I can. Well I hope that helps, I find focusing on one aspect of shooting at a time helps, I think working on backgrounds may be a good place to start.
Keep shooting and learning : )
lynn

hanging on the edge of soberity
by dtouch1

Comment by TooCool:
It's a snapshot and not very well focused one at that... Only thing I see that really fits the challenge is the title...
TC

hanging on the edge of soberity
by dtouch1

Comment by johnnymoretti:
C'mon.

"ROCKIN' AROUND THE CHRISTMAS TREE"
by dtouch1

Comment by dtouch1:

Originally posted by TooCool: From the Critique Club This is a wonderfully original and seasonal take on the challenge. Good points: See my first statement! Also the tonality here is very nice. Like the gold/train/pastel colors! Compositionally it's an interesting subject with neat framing. Bad points: There doesn't really seem to be a focal point here. The whole shot is slightly OOF. There is also alot of noise in most of the shot probably because of the low light situation. The black portion doesn't really seem to fit with the rest of the shot. I also think that the train needs to be a more prominent part of the shot. This would help to focus the eye and give more emphasis to the wonderful perspective lines of the track! My best suggestion is to pump up the light, play around with moving the train around a bit to find the best composition and keep shooting! If you can do a reshoot of this shot (I know the scene is kind of seasonal...) I would LOVE to see it! TC

I took about 50 shots of this before i finealy got one that i liked. i'll send you some photos. dave

"ROCKIN' AROUND THE CHRISTMAS TREE"
by dtouch1

Comment by TooCool:
From the Critique Club

This is a wonderfully original and seasonal take on the challenge.

Good points: See my first statement! Also the tonality here is very nice. Like the gold/train/pastel colors! Compositionally it's an interesting subject with neat framing.

Bad points: There doesn't really seem to be a focal point here. The whole shot is slightly OOF. There is also alot of noise in most of the shot probably because of the low light situation. The black portion doesn't really seem to fit with the rest of the shot. I also think that the train needs to be a more prominent part of the shot. This would help to focus the eye and give more emphasis to the wonderful perspective lines of the track!

My best suggestion is to pump up the light, play around with moving the train around a bit to find the best composition and keep shooting! If you can do a reshoot of this shot (I know the scene is kind of seasonal...) I would LOVE to see it!
TC

hanging on the edge of soberity
by dtouch1

Comment by cmangis:
This is a fun capture, but perhaps would have more impact if cropped in or framed better in general.

hanging on the edge of soberity
by dtouch1

Comment by vtruan:
Kind of snapshotty to me

hanging on the edge of soberity
by dtouch1

Comment by Polar7:
Looks like a fun time !

hanging on the edge of soberity
by dtouch1

Comment by Dave Gordon:
Not a bad party snapshot, but it needs more care in composition and lighting to make it more than that.

hanging on the edge of soberity
by dtouch1

Comment by Phantasy:
I assume by the poor focus here that the photographer was drunk as well.