Goodbye
by JLThomas

Comment by SDW:
From the Critique Club

Ok keeping it real here. I like what you attempted to accomplish. A very interesting set up and honestly feel it could of worked well if executed properly. There is something I am learning finally after two years here at DPChallenge and I think it applies to photography in general. If any portion of your photograph does not enhance the shot take it out or do everything legal to lessen it's appearance. That should of been done with the wrinkles in your backdrop (white) and on the floor especially. I'm looking at the subject, which by the way has nice textures on the seat, but my eyes are pulled down to the wrinkles on the floor just below the chair. Then when my eyes focus on that my peripheral vision brings my eyes up to the reflection's on the white backdrop on the side. See how elements that are distracting should of been remove or lessen there appearances in the photograph.

My take on your picture is that it's about a person here one second and gone the next. I hope I'm right on that. What you could of done is increase the appearance of the subject matter. In your photograph it is overpowered by the distractions. Well all except for the chair. The shirt should, IMO, been bolder not letting us see though it. and the shoes should of been brightened up to get more detail.

These are some of the thing I feel you could of done to make this photograph better. You are showing that you have the ability to be very creative and effective in your setup physically now it comes down to technically and I believe your are on the right track and we will be seeing higher scores from you.

Keep up the good work and I hope you find this critique helpful. If you have any questions about my critique feel free to contact me. I wish you the best in your future challenges.

regards,
SDW

Goodbye
by JLThomas

Comment by nlghttrain:
I like the idea but all the creases in the backdrop are taking so much away for me

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Comment by L o S T:
nice shot

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Comment by GT350:
I like the subject. The backdrop/sheets confuse me a little. My eye keeps getting drawn to the wrinkles.

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Comment by albc28:
This is a nice concept and nice location of your light. Your background takes away from the photo. There are too many wrinkles and different types of reflections off the sheet.

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Comment by kiwinick:
good idea 10

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Comment by ccasey:
I like the lighting and the idea--I think he vanished right? The sheet does not work for me however.

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Comment by nodster:
novel idea

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Comment by ShutterPug:
Intersting composition. Lighting is well executed aside from the blown highlights around the shoes.

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Comment by Tej:
Different and crisp. Hope this does well for you.8.