A Light On Whiteby
seebrownComment by CEJ: Hello from the Critque Club!
First - I don't know if I should feel honored to critique your first challenge entry or if I should chalk it up to bad luck of the draw. But I have studied your image and have the following to offer:
Composition/perspective - the amount of space in your image that your subject occupies is great. Really puts the focus on the subject. The shot is straight on though so it appears a little flat. If the shot had been cropped so the bulb was tilted or off center or the camera angle was like at 45 degrees, it would help the bulb pop out of the shot and give it a little more of a natural look. It is hard to make a lit bulb show its shape. The contact part of the bulb (the metal) has clear 'round' definition. But the bulb part (the glass) appears flat.
Color - obviously it is b/w. But you have some shades of gray that appear around the edges. Your image almost appears to be the opposite of the challenge requirements - white on light. This is not necessarily bad, but it should be consistent. A low light behind your background may have helped this. You would have kept the 'light' while also keeping the white. This may be more difficult since you may then lose definition of the bulb shape, but lowering the subject wattage or using a softer light bulb could overcome this.
Lighting - ha...obviously the bulb. You did a very nice job maintaining definition of the shape of the bulb while at the same time not blowing out the center portion where it is brightest - well done! It is a bit bright, yes. But does not apper to be blown out at all. You can clearly see the entire bulb shape. The above comment in color pertaining to the background and this one would be the hardest part of the image to control. As it is you did a nice job.
Challenge requirements - meets the chalenge very nicely. You definitely have an imagination and are creative and this will always help you.
Overall/my opinion - this is an excellent example of control and you have pulled it off nicely. You took a concept and produced and image that is reflective of that which is very apparent. You obviously thought about this before shooting and it shows. It is a clean shot with clear definition. I just would have liked to have seen it a little less staged and more haphazard. Overall you did a very nice job on a not so cooperative subject. Well done!
Message edited by author 2005-11-05 01:03:51.