"Will Work 4 Challenge Points!"
Greetings from the Critique Club!
Hello! I love this idea, very funny and unique. Those challenge points can be hard to get though as you are finding out.
Reading your notes, you were right in that for what you were going for in ideal was right on but as you also know the DPC Voter can be an unforgiving mistress and a cruel one at the same time. Looking over your profile and some of your other shots it would seem to me that your biggest obsticale or thing to work on is framing/composition and lighting. Both can be very hard to do at times.
On this particular shot, the idea is there but the feeling of desolation doesn't really come across, in that you don't look desperate in either appearance or surroundings. I know you were going for the laugh here and you did succeed in that sense but if you want to start going for more than just the laugh you need to consider all the elements of the shot, the way it's set up, does it draw the viewer in, will it keep their attention and does it tell a story all at the same time? Hard things to do and not always accomplished in every shot, just look at some of my stuff!
And the lighting, you were going for a mood and you could have still captured that mood with just a touch more contrast, muted colors are fine in some shots but with something like this where you have so many things competing for my attention, the muted colors really just make it all blend in together in the end and nothing holds my attention in the end.
Again, great idea and if you ever reshoot it I would love to see it, or even play with this one some more. Try some different cropping and post processing maybe.
Good luck in future challenges and I hope my comments help.