must practise more?
by hughletherenComment by ursula:
FROM THE CRITIQUE CLUB
I must say, you went to a lot of trouble to get your picture for this challenge! Box cutters, sticky tape, ladders, lights ... good thing you weren't trying to board a plane.
Our oldest son plays the jazz trumpet. He used to practice endlessly when he still lived with us, and I oftentimes would feel like doing what the person is doing in your cutout. So, during the voting your picture brought back memories of lots of sound - I guess what I'm saying is that IMO your picture fit the challenge quite nicely.
About the picture itself, I love the colours. The gold of the trumpet is beautiful, as is the black background and the white behind the silhouette. I like the golden glow around the head, and you couldn't have desaturated because then you would have lost the trumped colour also. The trumpet is nicely in focus without being oversharpened. I find the glare and in particular the reflections from stuff in the garage a bit distracting (since you were working so hard, you could have covered EVERYTHING in your garage - just joking :). I would have liked to see the whole trumpet (the mouthpiece is cut off).
Two suggestions with which to play around:
1) Could you have made the cutout larger, so that a little portion of it would be covered by the trumped (overlap)? In my head that looks good, but I don't know how it would work out.
2) I think I would prefer that the trumped were not quite on a straight diagonal, bottom left to top right (again I'm not sure, just something I'm trying to see).
Hope this helps a little. Take care,
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