~~~~Critique Club Comment~~~~
Composition (content)
Good idea and nice try with your "crap camera". :)
The challenge was square of course, so I can understand the decision to enter it as it is, but I think that photowise a huge composition improvement can be made by cropping it differently. The view on the folded bird is now very centered.
Lets forget about the square challenge. I would cut off 1/6th of the top and about 1/7th of the right side. That way you get a much more interaction between the hand, the orginal paper and the folded bird. And it takes away the motion blur and uninteresting black at the right.
As someone else said, the bird seems to float/fly. That is a very cool effect. Creative and well done.
Background
The soft darkbrown tones at the left are nice, the darker right side less so.
Camera Work (Technical)
It is hard to get the exposure on the hand better. More light would mean that the paper itself will be brighter as well, that way ruining the detail of the folded bird. I like the exposure as it is, the folded bird is detailed and bright, the center of attention and the unfolded paper is like a soft curtain.
I wonder how you created this effect, a shutter of 1/15 is slow. Hardly any time to tell when to pull the paper away. Or is it a multiexposure?
The bird is in focus and sharp.
Digital Processing (technical)
The image looks a bit noisy and details a tad soft. I think that that is caused by the heavy/agressive jpeg compression. Your picture is less than 25kb out of 150kb allowed. Saving it at a higher jpeg quality (less compression) can avoid the harshness of the noise, keep detail sharpness and avoid color degradations in the white's.
My opinion
Cool idea, composition and digital processing needs some improvement.
Message edited by author 2003-02-08 09:55:59. |
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