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Shrimp w/ Cocktail Sauce
Shrimp w/ Cocktail Sauce
Lydia


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Challenge: Extended Free Study 2019-07 (Extended Editing)
Collection: Portfolio
Camera: Apple iPhone Xs
Date: Aug 14, 2019
Date Uploaded: Aug 14, 2019

I had the flamingos (2)...

And no ideas for where I should put them.

Then, I put them in the scene, but there was no "story".
WHY were they there?

So, I took a shot of some shrimp we had in the 'fridge.

That was okay, but it needed a plate (and more shrimp than I had), so I took a shot of a plate and cocktail sauce... then used the shrimp shot on top... several times.

It's not my best work, but this is what comes of waiting until 2pm on the last day... *heavy sigh*

It's 6:15p now and I'm finished in time to fix Hubby his dinner.

:D

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08/23/2019 03:46:51 PM
Because you asked... I gave you a 6 for the work, but there's a lot here. Venser has covered much of it, particularly around "story" (you might have been able to tie it in with a title if you built it around "pink") but I'll add some.

When you're compositing you need to look at light and just looking at the coat rack you can see that light/shadows fan out from just that image and fade quickly, not like those on the flamingo that has them.

From there you've utterly messed with my OCD when it comes to lines and while the floor is fine your verticals are a bit of a mess for me, and a corner line always wins to a coat rack. You're shooting the room into the corner when perhaps you should have moved right and shot with the image plan parallel to the far wall.

Finally, it's vertical, and while I can see a lot of details here when it's presented to vote in a squashed format you lose details and nuance. I stay away from verticals whenever possible here for that reason.
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08/23/2019 02:11:22 PM
Anyone want to tell me (brutal honesty is fine with me!) what's wrong with my entry?
Lighting is a mess. The shrimp look like they were cut and put into this scene without regard of keeping continuity with the lighting of the surroundings; same with the flamingos. Shadows are missing. The flamingo standing on the plate should have a shadow that points to the lower left part of the image. You can see the shadow from the leg of the dresser cast by the window present in the scene.

From your comments: Then, I put them in the scene, but there was no "story".
WHY were they there?

Even with the shrimp, there's no story. It doesn't make sense.

Message edited by author 2019-08-23 14:27:06.
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