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07/23/2005 10:27:54 PM |
from the critique club:
I can appeciate the intent as there is great potential here. First, allow me to get the technical out of the way. No apparanr technical flaws. The exposure is satisfactory and the focus is great. The general clarity and lighting are all good.
It is the composition that detracts. A camera is a two dimensional instrument as such care must always be taken because what looks fully acceptable to the eyes (3 dimension) may suffer in two dimension. For example, the moment the viewer begins to look at this image the eyes end up to discern the subject's face. Note here how the first face eclipses the second into almost a quarter moon. Nothing wrong with these angles under certain circumstances, but follow the contour of the first face and a little bit of ambiguity is present. The viewer is then tempted to guess the facial expression. If you accept this then a different angle would have made the better image. There appears to be quite an absorption and interest expressed. A better angle would have raised this image from the snapshot feel it now has. Not at all a typical snapshots as they are not that generally sharp.
In changing the angle, more strength can be added by eliminating everything but the computer thing. Two faces absorbed and looking down into this little box with the camera right in front. I believe this is the image you missed here. However, we all look and sometimes the best occurs to us after it is all over.
This leads to the next suggestion: always try to visualize the image you want and then go get it. Believe me, it beats searching for one, though at times we do get lucky.
You obviously have the talent to take a good image as demostrated by this image, all you need do is plan a little and your results will improve at once. Make your next image better. |
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07/17/2005 10:39:38 PM |
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07/17/2005 11:53:48 AM |
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07/17/2005 11:10:18 AM |
| wish I could see a bit more face - make the kids the subjact, not the gameboy. oversharpened? |
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07/14/2005 02:05:13 PM |
| The colors in this image make it a but too busy for the subjects and mood. You might want to try it in B&W or partially de-saturated to tone it down a little bit. |
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07/13/2005 10:58:46 PM |
| Nice idea, but I would have chosen an angle that shows the boy in orange's face, and maybe more of the boy in blue. |
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07/12/2005 11:44:47 PM |
| Less profile, more face would have been even better. They love their Gameboys, though!! |
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07/12/2005 01:08:54 AM |
| nice candid, capturing that kind of concentration is always a bonus. |
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07/12/2005 01:03:51 AM |
| I would have liked to see both their faces. |
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07/11/2005 07:00:39 PM |
good shot... a different angle/viewpoint may have made the pic a bit more interesting. Subjects are a bit dark because of the direction of the sun. I like the photo though!
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07/11/2005 04:26:16 PM |
| too much sharpening I think, otherwise, nice portrayal of Family |
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07/11/2005 11:39:23 AM |
| Aweeeeeee why not take a step to the rigth so we can see both boys faces? Almost a very nice image. |
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07/11/2005 10:02:10 AM |
| would have liked to see the face of the other boy and the back of the sweater is burned out (or however you say that in english!) |
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07/11/2005 09:36:25 AM |
| I would have liked to see the intensity on at least one child's face. |
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07/11/2005 09:10:42 AM |
| a bit more of their faces would make a better shot to me. |
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07/11/2005 08:03:36 AM |
| Nice idea and the picture is sharp with great color. Just wish you had maybe used a different angle to include the other brother more. Love the hair lighting. |
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07/11/2005 01:32:17 AM |
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07/11/2005 01:20:27 AM |
| the anlge would have been better to include more of the boy in the orange. The detail, color, and contrast are all well done |
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07/11/2005 12:49:06 AM |
| Very nice Shot,comes together well...8 |
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07/11/2005 12:47:45 AM |
| The lighting is a tad brash to the left. Overall, the composition is a bit busy. Maybe shot from a different angle and filtered with black and white would have created more of the mood you were looking for. |
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07/11/2005 12:40:01 AM |
| There's not enough of the kid watching in the shot. A step or two to the right would really improve this. |
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