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05/23/2003 11:14:03 PM |
Greetings from the Critique Club!...
COMPOSITION... First off, I like the stark simplicity of this shot... Not everyone was a fan of the shadows but I think they make an interesting interplay with the actual wires/strings that are casting them. Their intersection creates a focal point in the image... Since the wires are mostly horizontal, you can emphasize this by creating a more panoramic crop - removing a bit from the bottom and top. A bit of subjective preference. -> I tend to like subjects more when they fill up the frame and when the frame aspect ratio fits with the subject of interest. Its by no means a hard-fast rule that must be followed but it does sometimes strengthen a composition...
TECHNIQUE... I really like the inclusion of the shadows and I would not have attempted to remove them. In fact, I would have tried to emphasize them more...The shadows are jet black on one side of the image but much lighter on the other. Could moving the position of the lights rendered all shadows a deep black? the wires/strings on the right side of the image are close to the background and therefore not casting a shadow...It would have been interesting to have raised them up a bit and played with their positioning until you had a consistent shadow effect going from one side of the string/wires to the other.... In the minor category, highlights do seem slightly harsh, and the absence of catch-lights on the red wire is noticeable...Either angle of the light is coming into play here or that red string/wire is made of a different material than the others...Either way you can reduce the harsh highlights by diffusing your light or maybe increasing the distance from subject to light source...
Overall, an interesting and visually appealing abstract image.... |
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05/18/2003 10:24:47 PM |
This is beautiful. I really like it a lot. It's first of all the simplicity of the composition that appeals to me. The primary colors are nicely exposed here too.
Good luck in the challenge and all your photographic endeavors. |
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05/18/2003 03:29:00 PM |
| Classic flow of lines and colors. |
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05/16/2003 11:30:23 PM |
| Modern, abstact feel to this image. The shadows and highlights seem to harsh for the flow in your composition |
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05/16/2003 06:48:39 AM |
| This is very interesting. I like how you have taken something so simple and taken an effective photo of it. |
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05/15/2003 10:55:27 PM |
| Very crisp and clean. Not too sure on the shadows. Pretty intense light, but gives it a surgical/sterile feel to it |
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05/15/2003 07:17:12 PM |
| simple.. nice ..and very good |
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05/15/2003 12:38:46 PM |
I really like this - simple composition and strong colour. The background has some gradiation of colour but otherwise it's great. This reminds me of one of the artworks based on the London Underground (Tube) - I can't recall the name but I will see if I can find it on the internet.
edit: Tate Gallery - 1986 - David Booth |
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05/14/2003 12:10:53 PM |
| wow.... very composition... It´s a shame the reflex in the blue and yellow cable |
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05/13/2003 02:32:41 PM |
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05/12/2003 04:40:22 PM |
| Very cool. Simple and effective. I like it Jacko. 9 |
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05/12/2003 04:23:38 PM |
| Simple and elegant and fun. |
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05/12/2003 02:59:21 PM |
| Meets the challenge fine but lacking a bit in interest. |
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05/12/2003 12:19:03 PM |
| Making keychains, eh? I like it! |
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05/12/2003 08:15:06 AM |
| Simple, but effective. Well done. I particularly like the stark shadows. |
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05/12/2003 04:01:22 AM |
| Neat idea, but it seems to need a bit more focus on the cables. Also the shadows are really dark amd distracting. It might look better with multiple light sources producing multiple but less intense shadows. |
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05/12/2003 01:54:41 AM |
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