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09/20/2005 03:35:27 AM |
Greetings from the Critique Club
I must say that this is one of the most unusual perspectives for a railway shot that I have seen. I do think that unusual perspective helped keep your score above 5.
The black and white conversion is good with tonalities going through full black to full white across the picture.
A few things that would help this picture:
1. DOF choice: In a shot like this with the one STRONG line leading through the picture, it would be better to start it out tack sharp and let it then fade out as you go through the picture. The line should produce the dynamic movement through the picture. Here, when you look at the picture, the eye has to struggle through the out of focus at the bottom of the picture to get to the part that is sharp.
2. Focal Point: Where does the leading line lead me to? What am I supposed to be looking at in the picture? Especially in this as a black and white photo, I need something to be looking at, and not just the line (the track) leading me through the photo. This also relates to the choice of DOF, as I get to the tack sharp point and want to be able to look at something there, but nothing appears and my eye wanders right off the top of the photo without being able to stop and 'rest'.
3. Clutter/Background: You already noticed some of this as in your comments, you had cloned out the grass blade and then noticed it was basic editing. What would help in this to start off with is to just go and pull the grass from the track before you take the shot, then you don't have to worry about it. Look at the background and ask, "Is there any way I can remove distractions from the background before I take the photo?"
4. Crop: Most photos of railway tracks are done in the vertical/portrait orientation rather than horizontal. A vertical/portrait orientation gives a sense of distance of the track seeming to extend to infinity and beyond. With this orientation in the photo, there is a sense of truncation, of stiltedness. There is too much space to the left and right of the track for my eye to drift back and forth.
Overall Impression: While I did not vote in this challenge, I would have scored this picture a 4. Removing the distractions from the background would bump it up to a 5. Correcting the DOF/orientation would possible bump it up another point to 6. I do think that your conversion to B&W is very good and your eye for a different perspective is commendable as well.
If you have any questions about this critique, please feel free to contact me via the PM system. |
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09/13/2005 11:28:56 PM |
| I really like the perspective of this shot. I almost know how an ant feels! |
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09/13/2005 12:16:10 PM |
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09/11/2005 01:07:26 AM |
| I think the close-up of the rail kills the sense of depth or perspective |
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09/10/2005 12:42:08 AM |
| I like the perspective in this shot. Great job. |
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09/09/2005 07:36:00 PM |
| Nice focus, placement, and point of view. |
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09/08/2005 07:51:36 PM |
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09/08/2005 04:55:46 PM |
| nice perspective, out of all of the railroad pics, this was the best one. |
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09/08/2005 04:25:26 PM |
| Love the angle you took for this shot. Very unique! |
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09/08/2005 02:18:09 PM |
| Would have liked it better if the rail was in sharp focus rather than the background/sides. |
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09/08/2005 01:24:36 PM |
| i like the idea of this shot but the fact that much of the rail in the foreground is too colse to be in focus hurts the shot |
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09/08/2005 12:20:50 PM |
| The DOF is a bit confusing here. I like the leading lines and the use of black and white. Nice idea! |
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09/08/2005 03:50:40 AM |
| a great leading lines photo! |
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09/08/2005 12:26:00 AM |
| Nice twist on the theme and well executed. |
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09/07/2005 11:34:18 PM |
| Without the title there's no indication that this is a branch of the railline. A junction would have made this reference clear for the viewer. A different approach but could have been more clear. |
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09/07/2005 01:09:33 PM |
| Not alot of visual impact here. Focus is off too. |
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09/07/2005 12:56:42 PM |
| interesting perspective, may do okay in next challenge |
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