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06/10/2003 10:39:03 PM |
Critique Club critique:
I must say that I was a bit lost looking at this photo during the challenge... it wasn't until your PM that I realized it was a passport in a shirt pocket! Kind of like one of those optical illusions where you cannot see the obvious. :-)
I like your creative approach to the challenge, which is made particularly meaningful since you truly were on your way home. Unfortunately, although the colors are rich and interesting, I think the pattern of the shirt distracted or camoflagued the overall effect of your shot and negatively impacted the feeling of 'home' you were trying to convey.
The inconsistent lighting across the shot also drew my attention. You have what is probably the ambient light inside the train across the shoulder of the shirt (imparting a very pleasant, warm feeling) contrasting with the sharp lighting and colors from the camera's flash. Given the conditions of your shot, I doubt you could have used the ambient light for the entire shot (no flash or reduced flash intensity), but if it were possible, I think the effect would have been quite 'cozy' and reinforced the feeling of home.
While the composition doesn't immediately jump out as being amazing, it works reasonably well for this shot. Your decision to include part of the collar brings some orientation for the viewer, and the tight crop to the bottom of the shot keeps everything well confined and without many distractions.
I hope these comments are of some help to you; if you have questions or would like me to clarify anything in the critique, PM me and I'd be happy to elaborate.
Paul. |
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06/03/2003 11:10:43 PM |
| similar in a way to my "Almost in the USA" pic from Your Corner of the World... so it shows something unmistakeably home. |
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06/03/2003 05:07:44 PM |
| Looks like a precarious way to carry your passport. |
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06/03/2003 09:19:59 AM |
| You should pocket your passport more securely in future or you'll be going nowhere! A bit too 'posed' for me this, but the immediate effect of the camouflaged pocket made me double-take. |
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06/02/2003 08:21:58 PM |
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06/02/2003 05:03:08 PM |
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06/02/2003 01:13:19 AM |
| ok you made me look. kind of like wearing stripes and poka-dots. made me smile:) quite a contrast. |
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05/30/2003 12:10:33 PM |
| reminds me of the shop 'Paperchase', good clear image. |
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05/30/2003 12:50:25 AM |
| I LOVE the shirt! I want to travel with THIS person next time I go on vacation. THEN, the people will point at HIS shirt, noy mine! ;) |
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05/28/2003 02:15:50 PM |
| A clever take on the challenge -- it DOES describe "your" home because of the passport! Cute! :) |
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05/28/2003 12:10:08 PM |
| I'm not sure what you're saying here. I do think your background is not very flattering to your book. Is that stitching on the bottom left? Not sure I get it, but very intriguing. |
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05/28/2003 08:07:37 AM |
| My passport never looked so good... |
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