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06/19/2003 06:28:36 PM |
*Critique Club*
General: For impact I would have probable chosen different coloured paperclips. Red is a more prominent colour than the green and yellow chosen.
Composition: You'r almost there with the composition. The tape dispenser adds balance though I think the paperclip dispenser is too central horizontally. A different vantage point would adjust this or just including a bit more to the right.
Exposure: The lighting seems a little flat. A little fill flash may have helped. I think if you just exposed it a little more you would blow out the foreground.
Impact: I don't think the vantage point chosen does justice to the image. Maybe shooting more from below and to the left would help here, keeping the same components within the frame.
Keep shooting.
Colette
Message edited by author 2003-06-19 18:38:23. |
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06/15/2003 10:43:28 PM |
| Clever idea and a fun shot. You might think about providing fun lighting or a unique perspective to enhance the feeling of whimsy and fun provided by the paper clips. Right now, they're pretty much on their own. |
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06/14/2003 08:39:30 PM |
| Nice capture, but photo lacks punch to really make it stand out. Better lighting, background and sharper focus could have made this really stand out. |
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06/14/2003 07:48:44 AM |
| Where have I seen this technique before? or maybe it's really stop motion I dunno! hehe.. I like the explosive feel of this picture. very nice! |
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06/13/2003 05:33:49 PM |
Run for your lives!
Heh. This made me smile -- definitely funny. I'm actually not sure if I like it with the tape dispenser but mostly I think because that's the brightest colour in the photo -- maybe if it were a bit more of a muted tone. The eyes keep going to there away from the 'action' of the shot. |
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06/13/2003 02:33:03 PM |
| 9 - very cute concept. :-> |
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06/12/2003 12:57:38 PM |
| The roll of tape is not really helping things in the picture. This might have been better if you didn't show the bottom of the cup, or the bottom of the screen behind it. You really lose the illusion of the paperclips in motion knowing that the screen is immediately behind the cup. If we couldn't see that at the bottom, it would be a better sell. Its a good idea, and this picture would've worked if you cropped off the bottom. I know why you didn't (the paperclips on the table), but I think weighing out the pluses and minuses, it would've been more conducive to cut it off |
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06/11/2003 01:50:57 PM |
| its a revolt! did you use saturation on this? its somehow got a funny feel to it from that. I like the composition though, very fun! :) |
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06/11/2003 11:46:35 AM |
| Wow - Now I know how I have more paper clips on my desk than the night before |
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06/11/2003 10:05:46 AM |
| Good job! Hope you'lll tell us how you did it. |
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06/10/2003 11:52:02 PM |
| Funny - wonder if it's the same person as the candies or someone copying the technique. Either way, interesting colors - the yellows and greens have a strange feel to them, while the blue is almost perfect. Focus is a tad off here. Great composition. 9 |
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06/09/2003 11:22:09 PM |
| I'm getting the idea behind these shots. Although it's already been done with jelly beans it hasn't gotten worn out yet. I do like the idea with the paper clips...good take on the challenge. I just don't like the tape dispenser in the photo. The vivid blue kind of wants to dominate the picture and takes away from the muted colors of the paper clips. Also, the table seems to want to go downhill to the viewers right. 7 Good luck in the challenge. |
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06/09/2003 08:16:00 PM |
| Not unlike the jellybeans creeping from their jar... |
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06/09/2003 01:06:21 PM |
| How did you do this? A nice idea, a sharper focus would have been nice but I can understand how that would be difficult if you are dealing with flying paper clips. Good luck with it. |
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