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Challenge: Shapes II (Basic Editing III)
Camera: Nikon D70s
Lens: Tokina AF 28-80mm f/2.8 AT-X 280AF Pro for Nikon
Location: Moscow, Russia
Date: Jan 3, 2006
ISO: 800
Galleries: Nude
Date Uploaded: Jan 3, 2006

One of about 40 photos taken with explicit consent of my heavily pregnant girlfriend. I was concentrating on the shape of her belly, but this one - taken very casually at the end, has the most effect.

Statistics
Place: 252 out of 366
Avg (all users): 4.9477
Avg (commenters): 5.7500
Avg (participants): 4.7868
Avg (non-participants): 5.0927
Views since voting: 2647
Views during voting: 476
Votes: 287
Comments: 7
Favorites: 0


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04/15/2006 12:04:41 AM
I viewed your site due to a comment you made on one of my shots.... and I am glad I did.... having visited your website with the majestic views of my ancestors homeland was a real treat for me... and then I viewed this shot.... As a mother of 4 sons and one who breast fed them, I was so moved by the uncomplicated beauty of this shot..... I so pray your child was delivered safe and your g/f is doing well..... blessings on your home... sincerely, Mac
01/18/2006 12:40:44 PM
::: Critique Club ::: [The Saj]

First Impressions: At first I liked this photo but something gnawed at me and it did not come across quite as pleasing as I would have figured it to be. And I scored it a little low. Perhaps lower than I should (In general, I seemed to have been a little more critical in my Shapes II scoring than average. That said.

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Composition: The composition avails itself to an almost abstract manner that would be very appealing in a painting; but I am not so sure about it's use in this photo is fully affective.

The capture of the breast itself is very pleasant. But my eye keeps drifting and being lost when it looks at the rest of the composition and I believe this is in part what most hurt this photograph's score.

Subject: Superb.... the subject is a thing of beauty. Your girlfriend's areola stands out strongly and the nipple is well defined lending to a very good model for a breast shot.

Technical (Colour, focus, and light): The sharpness and focus of this shot is quite nice. I found the lighting and shadowing to provide an excellent accent. The color tones are especially appealing IMHO, but also very subject to personal taste.

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Summary: There is a lot of potential with regards to the photographer's skill's and his particular choice of model for this shot. However, certain aspects of the composition throw the feel of the image off. A lot of potential. I gave it a (4) when I voted and I was in a critical mood. I think it was only a few points aspects of composition that kept me from giving this photo a 6 or maybe even a 7.

To improve?:

I believe that in part what is happening is that we are losing a bit of the definition of the human form with this composition. The breast is an obvious sign of the human form, however, the way the rest of the body is captured provides little definition. Perhaps an arm coming across the belly or zooming out in order to widen the shot may resolve this. Another alternative might be to change to a landscape shot and move up a couple of inches to capture some of the collar bone region as well.

Also, there is a lateral line showing in the photo, it creates a visual border about an inch from the left side of the photo. This also added a distracting element.

If these items were addressed I believe this photo would be on it's way to excellency. The lighting, the capture of the details of the breast, are all wonderfully executed.

It looks like you still have some time to do additional shooting with this model while she is pregnant and I highly encourage you to do so. You've got very good grasp on the lighting and capture and a wonderful model.

BTW.... Pozdravleneeya

Supposed to be "Congratulations" but my Russian is ochin plocha!

Keep warm....I hear it's beyond freezing in Moscow right now.

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It is my hope that these insights are helpful, and constructive. If you have any questions regarding this critique, please feel free to PM me.

- Jason "The Saj"

Message edited by author 2006-01-18 12:42:06.
  Photographer found comment helpful.
01/11/2006 12:33:44 PM
I take the point on lighting - my laptop gave a nice amber hue, but it's only two days ago I realised the WB in camera was set to shade. I would beg to differ on lighting - I like the softness of it and a little transitory vertical stripe. This, actually, what reminded me of a tree.
 Comments Made During the Challenge
01/10/2006 12:13:07 PM
Your composition is good, but your colors are flat, the color balance may off a bit or maybe your contrast.
01/06/2006 07:29:03 PM
I thought about doing this type of shot but my wife imediately said, "NO WAY"! I also like the lighting here.
01/05/2006 06:10:08 PM
Or the fruits of life?
01/04/2006 08:32:56 PM
I figured we would have more of these


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