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05/29/2006 09:55:30 AM |
| crap i jsut realised that most of what i said was already said. ah well it adds quantitative weight to the opinion i guess |
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05/29/2006 09:53:33 AM |
i think it could have been interesting if the lighting was different. something smoother and more dramatic, you know?
the strong reflection on the mask could be used but i dont think that coming formt his angle it adds alot to the photograph. perhaps if you had a generally dark setup, and illuminated it softly from the center bottom or center top, but softly, maybe in an reddish light even but not necessarily, it could have added an element of mystery of some sort, some shady obscur feeling to the photo. perhaps as well try it with something more interesting covering the table as opposed to the plain wooden table. or just pick a different table that can compliment the ancient-ness of the subjects int eh photo because this one, perhpas color perhaps material, doesnt really match. |
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05/27/2006 11:14:08 PM |
::: Critique Club :::
Hi, my name is Kari and from the critique club.
I am unsure why you have asked for a critique when you don't like what you did .. and only entered for in your words the sake of entering something. Oh well onwards and upwards I happen to like the pic.
First Impression - the most important one:
I love books and these old ones are interesting ... the mask in intriquing and adds intesting.
Composition:
this scene is a little too tightly croped for me ... I think that trying to hit the mask on the thirds vertically and horizontally would have worked better for the shot ... rather than dhaving his nose in the middle and making it a little centred.
Subject:
Meets the challenge ... I don't think you thought of the table surface .. the veneer doesn't work for this shot and covering it with fabric may have helped create an older feel which the books and mask do.
Technical (Colour and light):
The mask has a little too little light on the right side ... using something to reflect onto the side may have soften the image slightly.
To grow its vote?:
Think about all aspects .. the mask being on a piece of paper detracts a little, but having it on the table surface would have been worse ... you could have had it on one of the books and used that as the surface and also background.
Summary:
Just thoughts .. hope they help .. your portfolio is really good.
If you've got any questions about this critique, please feel free to contact me via the PM system.
Cheers
Kari |
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05/23/2006 10:06:25 AM |
| weirdly interesting object there, i like how you captured the old look of the books |
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05/22/2006 09:09:12 PM |
| Not enough detail in the mask, it looks rather like a gold blob, but the rest of the photo is great. |
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05/18/2006 10:45:43 AM |
| I like where you were trying to go with this but think the paper extending from the book and under the mask don't add to the image, they distract. Just my artistic opinion. |
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05/17/2006 05:00:04 PM |
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05/17/2006 10:10:20 AM |
| Old fashion books... Like everything old fashion :o) so... good luck |
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