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06/09/2006 08:41:23 AM |
Hello from The Critique Club! :)
This is a very dramatic shot that definately uses a single light source, however the challenge did require an artifical one, which the sun unfortunately is not. I think that mainly explains your low score, however I will focus on the technical aspects in this critique.
Compositionally, I feel this is slightly awkward. I feel this way because the plane is almost centered, but not quite. It's not centered enough to look like it is supposed to be, yet it is not far enough from the centre to be using the compositional rule of thirds. Either would be effective it its own way, but this "in between" feeling just feels a bit umbalanced. I think the very bright area on the right unbalances it further. I think moving the crop to the right so that both the plane and bright area were following the rule of thirds would greatly improve this photo.
I like the colour of the photo, the yellow definately giving it an added sense of drama, and making it more attractive in general. I'm not sure how much is natural or how much you altered it in the raw conversion, but its effective either way.
I think the final thing that lets this photo down a bit is the sharpening. You didn't mention it in your Photographer's comments, but I can see that you've done it because there is a white halo outlining the whole plane, which I feel is distracting. If you used Unsharp Mask, I think that you should have used a thinner radius. If you didn't use Unsharp Mask, I think you should have done :) I have a free video tutorial that covers Unsharp Mask in detail on my website at //www.konador.com/pp should you want to avoid the helo outlining in the future.
Overall, this is a good dramatic photo, which was unfortunately let down by not following the challenge description. I hope you found this critique useful :)
-Ben |
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06/07/2006 09:20:01 AM |
It's too bad that you did not follow the rules of this challenge.
A good pixr wasted, all for a silly virtual ribbon. |
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06/06/2006 03:55:58 PM |
this is not artifical light source |
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06/05/2006 10:12:47 AM |
This is a beautiful pic. What a great capture! 8 |
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06/05/2006 04:22:37 AM |
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06/04/2006 11:14:46 PM |
Good catch, the clouds colors really make the photo. |
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06/04/2006 08:49:32 PM |
not artificial light, DNMC, Great photo though |
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06/04/2006 12:45:23 AM |
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06/03/2006 02:58:42 PM |
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06/03/2006 01:18:55 PM |
Artificial light was the requirement |
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06/02/2006 12:00:30 AM |
Great capture, but where is the use of a single ARTIFICIAL light source? |
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06/01/2006 09:36:08 PM |
"hey kid, do a barrel roll" nice shot, what's the focal length on this, and did you change the color of the sky at all? |
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06/01/2006 12:03:10 PM |
No artificial light source... |
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06/01/2006 09:03:39 AM |
Unless that light in the corner is the 25Kw Night Sun on a Champion crane rig, this pix DNMC. Artificial light source, not natural light.
However, a nice capture, nice comp, great color, good natural light, nice movement |
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06/01/2006 12:30:39 AM |
Artificial light source?? |
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06/01/2006 12:25:44 AM |
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05/31/2006 07:13:21 PM |
The light source has to be artificial... but I like the image! |
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05/31/2006 03:36:53 PM |
natural lite or really really really big flashlite |
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05/31/2006 02:35:41 PM |
Doesn't look like an "artificial" light source as the challenge description states. |
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05/31/2006 11:32:33 AM |
Did it turn out alright - I wonder :o) Looks nice, great shot :o) |
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05/31/2006 10:22:01 AM |
Rules require "artificial light source" |
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05/31/2006 10:06:47 AM |
The yellow lines around the plane gives a strange effect.. |
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05/31/2006 05:34:17 AM |
Nice picture - however, the light source was supposed to be artificial. |
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05/31/2006 04:51:57 AM |
DNMC - no artificial light source |
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05/31/2006 03:14:48 AM |
Cool. But is the Sun an artificial light source? |
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05/31/2006 12:25:56 AM |
Even though the challenge says "artificial light source" I'll give you 100% of the score I would have given you if this would have been lit with a flashlight instead of sunlight...why? Because on the "2 second" challenge there was a lot of discussion on "if it doesn't break the advanced or basic editing rules then all is fair game. A DNMC does not automatically get a low score. |
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