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06/09/2006 12:54:58 AM |
From the Critique Club
Your picture is ok but lacks the power needed to retain the attention of the viewer. First I would like to say your lighting is good. There are a few things I would have to recommend changing about your photograph. First your subject is to centered and the power of the water behind him pulls my eyes to the waves because they are visually more exciting. I would of cropped in such a way to make the subject off center and I would of cropped off about 20% of the top of the photograph. The old saying if it does nothing to improve the photograph, take it out.
As far as taking the picture I believe a bird in flight would of worked better given the title of your photograph. Or maybe this shot with a lower point of view. If you look in the eyes of the bird they are really soft, almost out of focus.
Overall a good photograph but the subject in its position and light not powerful enough to pull out a high score. When taking a photograph make sure your subject is more powerful than the environment around him, IMO. Keep up the good work. This may have not been your best work or best score but you have room for improvement and I believe you will. Keep at it because your shot was good. It just need those things that take a picture over the top.
I just looked at your profile and see this is your first entry. Please don't take my critique as a bad thing look at it as something to build on. I remember my first challenge, I destroyed it. I think I scored 4.8 or so. It was so small you could of called it a postage stamp. I had lens glare and the colors was washed. I was down about my score until a kind member PMed me and gave me a good critique. That member did me the best favor being honest. I know I'm not near the photographer that some are here but I can tell you what I see and how I feel about your photograph and hope you take it as constructive. If you do your score will do nothing but improve.
Thanks for letting me be your first Critique. I hope to see you in many more challenges.
I hope you find this critique helpful.
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06/06/2006 07:52:14 PM |
| I would suggest a tighter crop especially at the top and right side |
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06/06/2006 04:31:09 PM |
| dull composition and color |
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06/01/2006 07:56:00 AM |
| not bad, but would have a little more impact if the bird wasn't smack bang in the middle of the picture. |
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05/31/2006 12:21:25 PM |
| I'd prefer it if the bird was flying |
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05/31/2006 12:16:31 PM |
| ......this shot for me is not bad but think it could have been vastly improved by choosing a different vantage point from which to shoot. try lying on the ground, shooting wide open ... I think this would have greatly improved this capture. Also, the framing is a little loose and the subject too center frame. Lastly, I can't see that the eye is tack sharp from this web version. |
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05/31/2006 10:59:10 AM |
| Bird seems a bit too centered and I think I'd have cropped the water a bit more, but pretty nice job. |
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