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10/03/2006 02:27:23 AM |
::: Critique Club ::: [The Saj]
First Impressions: Needs work...
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Composition: Composition is unclear. Your title states the road as the focus. But the road seems to be a secondary element. Without looking at the title I am left wondering what is the subject. Is it the pillar?
Subject: Is not emphasized in the photo.
Technical (Colour, focus, and light): Color is nicely captured. Focus is good. Lighting is good. However, the photo is a bit dark and could benefit from some brightness as the trees are much too shadowed.
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To improve?: To be honest, there is much too improve. But don't be discouraged. You have come to the right place. I see that this is your first entry. DPC will help you improve your photographs by leaps and bounds. I've been on for about 2 yrs now. My scores have improved somewhat. But my knowledge and photography have improved quite a bit (as noticed by my friends).
Now back to the photo. I'd consider perhaps a closer view capturing the road in more detail in order to heighten the path of lines. If you were to crop the rightside so as to include the pillar on the right as opposed to center. And cropped out the tree on the left which just becomes distracting as it is half cut. This would provide a much stronger focus on the road.
Also, lowering your point of view closer to the ground would have increased the visualization of the brick road and also added emphasis.
Summary: It's not a ribbon but it's also a first entry. The photographer should not be discouraged. This is an excellent environment to learn and improve.
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It is my hope that these insights are helpful, and constructive. If you have any questions regarding this critique, please feel free to PM me. Also feel free to PM me with any feedback on this critique. And please remember to mark it "Helpful" if you found it so.
- Jason "The Saj" |
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09/26/2006 07:27:04 AM |
| Lighting could be improved as could composition. |
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09/24/2006 08:05:57 AM |
| If I didnt read the title, I would not have know the road was brick. May be you should have zoomed in on the brick road more and possibly got less of the trees. I would have taken a few steps to the right, panned down a bit and got the roses and brick path and left out the trees. Then the brick road would have made more impact on the picture. |
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09/22/2006 07:25:09 AM |
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09/20/2006 11:13:57 PM |
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09/20/2006 08:00:58 PM |
| I think a different point of view would help make this an even better picture. The path almost immediately leads the eyes out of the picture instead of further into the picture. |
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09/20/2006 06:13:14 PM |
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09/20/2006 12:05:21 PM |
| Would be a better shot if it was brighter. Can't really see the brick road. |
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