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From my perspective, what we have here is an interesting subject captured in about as mundane a manner as could be imagined. The light is very flat, the composition is not dynamic at all, and the whole image is entirely dependent on the graffiti itself for its impact. Although there are figures (artists) in the scene, they are strangely secondary to the image.
Some thoughts for you:
1. Where you are standing, the light's pretty much coming from directly behind you. This is usually the kiss of death for an image. Imagine if you'd gone tot he OTHER side of the kneeling figure, so you were shooting across the light and his shape was strongly modeled or even backlit a little, in semi-silhouette. Do this, maybe move in to such a position that the figure dominates one side of the image, and actually get a shot where you can see the paint (backlit) coming from the nozzle of the can... That's just one possibility. You need to get us involved in the image.
2. As a very general rule, "street photography" works better if we can see faces. Admittedly, that's a problem when they are inches from a wall, but some sort of closer connection tot he artists might help here.
3. You have a color-balance problem, with the whole image coming across too yellow/orange. It's a subtle shift, but an annoying one.
It's difficult to work off such a small image, but here's an example of a more dynamic crop and a better-balanced color, at least IMO: the edge vignetting, however, would not be legal in basic editing.
Hope this has been useful to you.
Robt. |
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