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05/13/2004 06:03:33 PM |
Hi Brad and * Greetings from the Critique Club *
I found the abstract challenge to be a lot of fun with loads of interesting entries. I, for one, did not recognize your subject until I read your photographer's comment - so it meets the challenge for me.
But - looking through other comments - some may have deducted points because it was "not abstract enough" for their taste. That may partly explain why your score is not as high as you'd like.
As the challenge said, abstract is about lines, shapes and colors. Let's discuss your image relative to that description.
First - your selection of colors that work together is SUPERB. The soft blues are perfect companions to the yellows. Just squint your eyes closed a bit and enjoy the colors. The use of glass to pick up and display hints of colors is also very effective. IT also added some interesting shapes.
You have some nice lines as well - the slightly arcing lines of the bulb and the repeated shape on the glass bowls work hand in hand. But, here is where the composition falls apart a bit. Those wonderful shapes are starkly interrrupted by the straight lines of your border.
I think if you re-shot this - but composed it so the tube on the left side were allowed to "complete the circle" by moving the camera to the left, it would be a much better composition. The viewer could then follow the tube around the left side - and be drawn back into the main picture.
Another problem - the viewer's eye will normally gravitate to the area of most contrast - in this case the bright blue-white areas in the left border. But, once there... there's no "logical way" to wander.
Some have commented on your choice of border. I must admit it does violate my own primary rules of borders that says "They should never compete with the image."
Finally - an easy post shoot processing glitch. Look closely at the yellow bright areas at the top and note the "dripping paint effect" of the transition areas. This can easily be corrected by not saving the jpeg so compressed. Your image was only 50k - so try saving it less compressed - closer to the 150 k limit next time.
Remember - these are just "one man's opinion" and just my thoughts how how you can take your really nice image and make it even better.
Good shooting
-Tom-
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05/08/2004 09:12:37 PM |
| I'm not normall a fan of the frames but in this, the fram e is more abstract than the main image....I might have gone with a tighter shot on the front vessels on an angle to improve the composition and had less of the background....though I like the color of the BG.....and maybe less of the large light in the middle. |
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05/07/2004 12:59:03 AM |
| Did a great job capturing the image . . . . just not quite hitting me as far as composition and impact go. Meeting the challenge???? I am on the fence. |
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05/04/2004 02:13:28 PM |
| Good picture, but perhaps a bit too literal to be classed as 'abstract' 'm not complaining though. |
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05/03/2004 05:13:42 PM |
| No complaints with the technical merits--nice lighting, nice focus. Asthetically, it's just not interesting to me. |
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05/03/2004 01:57:19 PM |
| Hmmmmmm, a little more analytical than abstract, but no matter. This image is well done. I especially like the "lighting". -8 |
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05/03/2004 04:35:38 AM |
| Interesting. Scientifically interesting. |
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