Joyfulby
shutterphunkComment: G'day from the Critique Club
You have done well with this photo. The tones are most definitely within the high contrast range. The stop action of the movement is well handled.
I find my eyes are constantly drawn to the splashing of the toes. That is helped by the whole layout of this image. That is, the angle of the pier pointing towards the model (yourself) and the pose in which you have chosen with your arms and your eyes pointing to the toes. Well done on that respect.
Now for the areas that I feel could have improved the score of this image. I feel the hat could be removed. Yes, it looks like it may have been a cold day but I think with the wind obviously moving the water, the movement of the hair will have added impact even in a small way.
The edge across the bottom would have been better cropped out to put all the focus on the main subject instead of detracting from it.
I would also like to have seen maybe a zoomed out composition with more vacant area to the right of the model to add that extra impact also. This would make people wonder more about the shot and what the woman may have been contemplating. As it is, your expression (although seeming to be joyed) tells too much and prevents the viewer from having to think. When you get the viewer to think about your image than you have more than succeeded.
In summary....you look great in photos and you are definitely on the right track. I would love to see a reshoot of this series. Please let me know when you have done so.
Judi
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