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02/01/2006 05:22:47 PM |
A few compositional tips. I think slanted subjects are more appealing to the eye if they slant "into" the picture rather than "out of". With that we need to move the flower to the left. This will do a few things for us. 1) Less bench. It isn't as appealing as the nice green of the grass. 2) No second flower or bush. The plant in the lower right corner distracts without adding additional effect.
If possible, I would have gotten a bit closer so the flower itself is in the top half of the picture instead of the bottom half. Just seems to balance better that way.
Your colors are nice however and the blue/violet contrasts nicely with the green.
EDIT: haha, I see you figured this out all on your own. :)
Message edited by author 2006-02-01 17:24:37. |
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02/01/2006 04:43:53 PM |
| If I had wanted another flower/bees picture then that's what I would have presented. That was not the idea. Thanks for the suggestion for a different photo though. |
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02/01/2006 03:28:24 PM |
| Imagine it cropped so that only the bees and the one flower are in the frame. The bench, tree trunks, and the second flower are just distractions. |
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02/01/2006 02:50:42 PM |
*** Self Critique ***
Colours are vibrant and there is a sense of openness yet the bees are going about their activity with out notice of the background.
That being the message I was trying to portray I think the flower and the bees need to be sharper.
The bench is a major element yet detracts the viewer from the main intended content as does the flower in the lower right. The flower could be cropped without losing anything.
As far as making the bench less distracting, possibly trying for a slightly different angle to include less of it and more of the trees in the background. Also, more dof would give more definition to the background and possibly make it less distracting.
All in all, something to try again come spring. |
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01/29/2006 10:24:05 PM |
| nice use of a long lens, comp ok, benc distracting, nice color, good light, excellent texture, minimalistic feel, blacks ok, whites barely in, overall can be done better |
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01/28/2006 10:58:36 AM |
| Maybe tighter croping (cloning) to remove distraction in lower right?? |
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01/27/2006 04:31:28 PM |
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01/26/2006 11:19:59 PM |
| SHoulda cropped out the bench |
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01/26/2006 10:56:04 PM |
| I think this could have done with a little more cropping as it is really oblivious. the flower on its own with the green background would have been awesome. |
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01/26/2006 05:26:03 AM |
| I would have liked to see this cropped a lot closer, to much space... |
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01/22/2006 11:20:24 AM |
| Interesting picture, Love the splines on the flower. I might have cropped it a bit tighter to get rid on the 2 tree trunks and the other flower(?) in the bottom right. I like the bench though, seems to add to the picture well. |
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01/21/2006 02:27:27 PM |
| I think the plant is too small in the frame. I would have liked to see it closer and in more detail :) |
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01/21/2006 09:47:02 AM |
| tighter crop and clone out the bench would help this imo. Like the color of the flower |
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01/20/2006 06:03:37 PM |
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01/20/2006 04:56:38 PM |
| interesting idea, but I think the bench, even as OOF as it is, invades the photo a little too much, distracting from your subject. |
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01/20/2006 04:48:07 PM |
| great marco shot, i love the purple but i find the other bur in the bottom right distracting |
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01/20/2006 01:12:42 PM |
| Very nice DoF. Lovely colors. |
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01/18/2006 09:04:13 AM |
| the composition is different...the colors sharp and vibrant... |
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01/18/2006 01:37:12 AM |
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01/17/2006 10:59:56 PM |
| I suspect your focus is the bees - the bench is a bit overpowering in that case. |
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01/16/2006 12:48:36 PM |
| Think more cropping should have been done here. The bench on the left seems a bit distracting. |
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01/16/2006 09:12:28 AM |
| There is something I like about this pic, but I can't decide if I like it better with or without that dead flower in the corner of the pic. hmmm |
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01/16/2006 01:55:06 AM |
Great DoF and color - makes the main subject pop.
However, the extra plant in the lower right is distracting - I would very much suggest cropping that out. Also, I think dropping down for a lower angle and to the left (and zooming in a bit more) would give the main subject a more prominant composure. |
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