::: Critique Club ::: [The Saj]
First Impressions: At first I noticed the wonderful textures and white and then a mere moment later I was drawn to the boys face.
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Composition: The composition is well done and works well in the positioning of the head covering & leaves and the chest piece. However I almost feel a touch cut-off on the right hand side. I'd have to see the original scene to really determine if it was the best position to crop.
Subject: Excellent choice of subject. Solemn expression on the boy combined with excellent surrounding textures. Very good contrast between the light and the dark tones.
Technical (Colour, focus, and light): I feel the lighting and color is spot on. The focus is good, with the background strongly blurred but all of the foreground remaining well reasonably well focused. However, even with the background nicely blurred there background elements are still a bit distracting.
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Summary: Overall, a very nice take with just a few minor distractive elements. It does fall a bit to the "poster child feel" thanks to the main subject's expression. And that might create a "we've been here many times feel". However, I feel the wonderful textures of woven reeds and leaves greatly diffuse such concern.
To improve?: I am wondering if this is the best expression to have captured? It looks like a ceremony or celebration, in which I'd expect a bit more expression. But I am ignorant and for all I know this may be a funeral procession and thus a very applicable expression.
The only other two items I would point to is the right side edge, I just keep feeling as if I want a little bit more. And the background elements. There is obviously a similar leaf type structure in the background. Though it is nicely blurred there is not enough contract between the foreground leaf elements and the background leaf elements to distinguish them from one another clearly.
As this was an entry in the singled out challenge, it might have been better to have zoomed out a bit to show more of the scene.
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It is my hope that these insights are helpful, and constructive. If you have any questions regarding this critique, please feel free to PM me.
- Jason "The Saj"
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