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03/10/2006 12:21:23 AM |
**Greetings from the Critique Club**
I see here creative and cheerful composition that definately meet the spirit of the challenge as this would be considered an odd couple.
Off the bat, remember this is in my opinion, the shallow Depth of Field is probably the number one factor in the score that you received. There are several areas that are out of focus due to the DOF. They tend to compete with the areas of very sharp focus primarily the faces of our subject.
Our eyes are funny things and want to see everything in focus. The faces of your models are tack sharp and the eye does not need to work to see those clearly but then they catch the large dark area in the foreground that is out of focus. The viewer is immediately drawn away from the subject to that area and trys to make it clear. Once evident that I can't bring that to focus the hand pops out as being unclear.
Shallow DOF creates a Conflict to the viewer in this case. The viewers eyes dart around the composition never staying in one area long enough to put it all together.
It seems there is plenty of light on the subject; so to create a deeper DOF I might have used a smaller Aperture somewhere around f/8 or so. A deeper DOF would bring the foreground into focus making it less a distraction. If the background becomes In focus (because you have it nicely blurred here) I would move the models further away from it.
Other things that we could do to make it more DPC appealing would be a crop that eliminates as much of the OOF are as possible. Or better yet as this was an advanced challenge add a Romantic (soft) effect to the entire shot, by duplicating the entire shot, applying some gaussian blur to the top layer and then making that top layer transparent just to the point where there entire shot is soft but detail of the faces come through.
Final thought would be, beings that this setup appears to be a portrait (I'm assuming because of the background) I think I would use the pose you have but turned the female head to look at the camera.
Just my thoughts...
Andy
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03/04/2006 04:55:19 PM |
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02/28/2006 08:05:05 PM |
| Cute couple. I think they'll last. Her out of focus hand is a little distracting to me. |
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02/27/2006 03:44:45 PM |
| Great lightning, funny creativ colors. |
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02/27/2006 03:28:56 PM |
| Yes, you're on topic, but I find the OOF foreground very distracting. |
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