Greetings from the Critique Club!
Initial impression: I feel for you because I've often tried to pull off similar material. Everything is just too centred and bland.
Technical: Composition plays very safe...no framing or leading lines, a little nod to rule of thirds. But shot is simply that of a water bottle top, nothing more. You need more. Focus is off and I do agree that the circles should be super-crisp to stand out from the background. Ambient lighting is OK. Why such a high ISO? Leaving the shutter open longer, even at a speed of 25 or so, at an ISO of 200 or even lower may have resulted in a more interesting shot. If you used a high ISO because you shot handheld, invest in a tripod, even if it's a cheap $25 one from Wallyworld. I did! :-)
Artistic: Again, I can see what you tried to do here - please take a look at my early stuff! - but you must have strong execution (technicals) to carry off the concept (artistic). There has to be a level of interest - a crooked blind, use of perspective, a ray of light, a blast of colour - to help awaken this shot and draw the eye to it and keep the viewer looking at it.
Overall: Not a bad idea in terms of basics. Experiment with shutter speeds. The only way you can learn to do well is by doing whatever-it-is - in this case, photography - by going out there and shooting. A lot.
Feel free to PM me with any questions,
Susan |
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