Electric Dreams of a Passionate Mother
by LeeD

Comment:
I am commenting because you felt you didn't have enough constructive criticism. I am hardly a person with skill or experience, but if you can accept my opinions, I think I have found three things that are perhaps the reasons that people didn't like it. Knowing how it was done helps a lot in making this sort of comment.

I personally feel the picture is very interesting, very punchy, but a little lacking in basic appeal.

1. The lines - I saw three kinds of lines on her body. Straight-ish, hurried lines, Wild, passionate, electric lines with lots of squiggle and spark, resembling lightning (even the ones that were shorter still fall into this category for the erratic pattern) and finger smudges.
I found the finger smudges very appealing. They added greatly to the picture's content and meaning.
I felt the unstable lines (right leg, both sides of the belly and arms) added to the picture both in the sense of adding electricity and providing the setting for the passionate smudging on the breast
I felt the straightish lines looked hurried and didn't add much. The fact that they were quite prominent in the main focal areas (foreground leg, and most notably center belly) meant you had to look harder for the more complex and interesting lines. They weren't really terrible, so don't take that meaning, but perhaps just a little too straight.

Personally, I would guess that a few more smudges, sparingly added, particularly to break up the straighter lines, would have added a lot more tension and passion to this very good picture.

The C-section scar didn't need much explaining except that it was on such a trim woman. Post partum weight loss is your friend! I felt it added a lot to the picture. Having known a handful of women who were open about being uncomfortable about the way they looked to their SO's with that scar, I could see this as being a real expression of uninhibited passion.

2. The face - Burn tool? That would have taken some work because of the hair. Would it have been possible to mix some of her real hair in with the Pink hair? It looks like the pink hair really caught all that black light and brightened the face disproportionately. Another thing you might try is the black light paint in the hair in streaks instead of a wig? A little sensuous toussling of the hair with some paint and styling gel might reduce the light and reduce the straggly hairs.

3. The eye - there is something very sloppy about the appearance of the eye. It is a sensual picture overall, but the eye looks somewhat too young or too innocent? Perhaps a little more starkness, again, maybe burning?

Hope it's useful. Well done with the pic. I never would have taken anything like this. Both because of my limited skill with cameras and my limited skill with females :(.

...that feeling, someone is watching me.
by aplomb76

Comment:
This is a totally awesome shot.

PS. Sin City is my favorite movie I haven't watched yet. Itching for it to come out in rental. I limit myself to one movie per year in the theater.

Quasi una fantasia
by nico_blue

Comment:
Wow.

However, technically, I must say that this shot could definitely be improved.... if you had superpowers...

On second thoughts, I can't think of any super powers that would make this a better shot.

Perfect!

Flowing From the Old to the New
by Buckeye_Fan

Comment:
I really like the Idea here. but I would have to say that something about the way it was done leaves a little to be desired. I wonder if you could have used macro and shallow depth of field to some effect with the idea of using a sheet.

I'm sure others will comment on the rest of the issues, such as the lighting on the black curtain and the red cast on the white sheet.

Well done on actually doing something and entering it, which is better than I could say for myself.

ignore the background...concentrate on the agony
by Truegsht

Comment:
I wonder what would have happened if you had lain on your stomach and looked up, with your arms pulling the legs down in a more conventional contortionist pose? You might have had the feet pointing down to lessen the size disparity and add to the stretching effect.

For the background, did you think of taking a white sheet and draping it over a couple of broomsticks stuck vertically in between your mattress and the bed frame?

I actually thought when I first saw this pic that it was your son who had fallen backwards from sitting on your shoulders...

The pic would do better if it was shot with a view to more clarity.

You could try a desat, leaving the reds and really make your face pop!

Worn Lego does the Impossible
by Steveinnz

Comment:
I actually like this pic. I wish the left edge was a little straighter, but I think the setup is pretty good. It's true, it's a bit soft and has weird lighting, but I think it has a nice feel to it and the choice of lego character is excellent in the face.

The illusion is pretty good too.

They sure don't make it like they used to.

delusion
by whiteroom

Comment:
Ahh the illusion of intelligence in those who have control. Clearly bespoken by the cigarette... A clear indicator of a weak mind willing to be enslaved by advertising and addiction.

Super pic! I like the lack of footprints where the guy is coming from too!

mediallusion
by barndog

Comment:
This is a nice pic that looks like it was widely misunderstood. I think the red was too far from blood. Obviously, you couldn't go too dark, or people would think it was just ATF.

This is really well thought out obviously. The only thing I would change is to put top gun underneath Saving Ryan's Privates and crop IN.

It's not really amazing as it only took 30 seconds to do, but it might give you an idea...



Message edited by author 2005-08-17 23:22:07.

Reflection from a clubhead
by marvin

Comment:
Nice reflection shot, the illusion here is clearly the "Sport" of Golf!

God, Can You Hear Me Now?
by lshles

Comment:
Woah. This title is awesome. I love a good slam against the church now and again. The symbolism is always so deep with the church, so there's always a multiplicity of meanings. The simple link of the phallic origin of the steeple spans out tremendously... The size of cell phones seems to be such an issue these days too...

Too bad about the sky, and some elements could stand to be lined up just a hair better, but totally great concept. Like what everyone else said, the title makes it.

Nothing of course is as good as the pic in my wallet from a newspaper of Pope John Paul going in for a kiss on a 7 year old boy, on the Lips! and with his mouth Open!...