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01/23/2009 09:48:35 PM |
don't be so hard on the critique club...unless you're looking for trouble ;)
would have been funnier with a negative number showing on the calculator...or at least 80085 ;)
Edited: because I'm an 8008 and didn't realize it worked right side up ;)
Message edited by author 2009-01-23 21:52:02. |
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12/27/2005 11:28:31 AM |
Originally posted by hbunch7187:
*Critique Club*
I think this is an excellent idea and hits the challenge perfectly. The only real problem for me, is that it's just not a visually appealing photo. Technically, I think it's well done. Good focus and clarity. We get nice details in the words and we get to see the humor in the shot.
Lighting is good, there are no horrible hot spots or distracting shadows. I think that's really important because of the words, if you get bad lighting, all the words would be unreadable and this shot wouldn't have as much humor value.
I do think it's a bit crowded. I think one of the pencils and the other 1040 form on the right could be removed without hurting the photo. It just seems like too many items crammed into the photo and feels very set up. TOO set up. Of course, I'd have to actually SEE it without the pencil and paper to determine if it looks better that way, or if it then seems to be missing something, but definately it seems like it's too forced.
Overall, it's technically good and a great idea, just lacking some visual punch.
~Heather~ |
Thanks for the critique, Heather. I appreciate the time you spent analyzing and commenting and I welcome all who are interested in providing useful, constructive (positive or negative) feedback, to comment on or provide an in-depth critique of any of my work, either openly or via PM.
It's a given that a good photograph speaks for itself with little or no additional "explanation" necessary. However, by way of going a little deeper than the immediate, superficial layer of understanding, I submit the following thoughts for the viewers' consideration (quoting, in part, from the critique, above):
I do think it's a bit crowded.
It's crowded to reflect the "crowded', busy life of an adult.
I think one of the pencils and the other 1040 form on the right could be removed without hurting the photo. It just seems like too many items crammed into the photo...
There are two pencils because one is broken (as a result of stress and tension - the guy's on tranqulizers for a reason! LOL! BTW, the presription label is totally home made & put onto an allergy pill vial). It's not at all uncommon to have a spare pencil handy. If one looks closely, they see that the "other 1040" is actually the sample sheet (part of the instructions). The instructions are included because they are frequently more of a source of anxiety and irritation than a help. As for "too many items crammed in...", there are plenty of people who have to literally clear off just the corner of a table or desk to make room to perform a task like writing a letter or filling out a form because their kids or spouse have the rest of the space occupied with their own "projects".
Of course, I'd have to actually SEE it without the pencil and paper to determine if it looks better that way, or if it then seems to be missing something, but definately it seems like it's too forced.
Overall, it's technically good and a great idea, just lacking some visual punch.
I did see it without these elements (pencil & paper) in several of the out-takes leading up to the final version. It did not convey the sense of crowding that I was after (and thankfully, achieved). I made the lighting as flat and "boring" as I could - while, at the same time, trying to hold detail - again in reference to the boring, routine nature of so many aspects of adult life.
Thank you (and everyone else), again, for your comments. I wish everyone at DPC a happy, healthy, prosperous New Year! God Bless!
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12/18/2005 11:04:06 PM |
Originally posted by blindjustice:
The IRs gets mad when you fill it out in pencil; Lacks some duende/ perhaps a less cluttered shot would improve the compostiion. |
That's OK - I get mad at the IRS for myriad reasons (none of them involving pencils, per se (pencil necks, maybe - but that's another story ;) )
Here's some duende for ya - "The first thing we do, let's kill all the lawyers". - (W. Shakespeare, "Henry VI", Act IV, Scene II)
Lastly, yer band needs more cowbell! :))
Just funnin' ya! :)) |
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12/16/2005 08:10:06 AM |
| The IRs gets mad when you fill it out in pencil; Lacks some duende/ perhaps a less cluttered shot would improve the compostiion. |
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12/09/2005 12:42:56 PM |
*Critique Club*
I think this is an excellent idea and hits the challenge perfectly. The only real problem for me, is that it's just not a visually appealing photo. Technically, I think it's well done. Good focus and clarity. We get nice details in the words and we get to see the humor in the shot.
Lighting is good, there are no horrible hot spots or distracting shadows. I think that's really important because of the words, if you get bad lighting, all the words would be unreadable and this shot wouldn't have as much humor value.
I do think it's a bit crowded. I think one of the pencils and the other 1040 form on the right could be removed without hurting the photo. It just seems like too many items crammed into the photo and feels very set up. TOO set up. Of course, I'd have to actually SEE it without the pencil and paper to determine if it looks better that way, or if it then seems to be missing something, but definately it seems like it's too forced.
Overall, it's technically good and a great idea, just lacking some visual punch.
~Heather~ |
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12/04/2005 10:18:22 PM |
| Larry Moe and Curly? 98.7% chance this photographer is male. |
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12/04/2005 10:13:12 PM |
| yes, these are what adults have to contend with. A nice reminder. |
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12/02/2005 04:05:35 PM |
| Very nicely done and suits the challenge to a "t". |
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12/01/2005 03:54:38 PM |
| So much do I hate doing taxes that I could never create a photo like this. Oh, wow!...there are instructions? |
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11/29/2005 09:54:59 PM |
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11/29/2005 09:19:48 AM |
| I love this idea! It is so accurate--good job. |
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11/28/2005 07:30:41 PM |
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11/28/2005 05:47:14 PM |
| great composition and photo idea for this challenge. i'm impressed at the "citizen" prescription, as well! nicely done. |
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11/28/2005 10:06:09 AM |
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11/28/2005 06:50:18 AM |
| This is the best lay out for the bills/taxes idea!!! Nice lighting and composition! |
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11/28/2005 03:07:07 AM |
| so true head aches every year .8 |
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11/28/2005 02:41:06 AM |
| This was the first thing that entered my head when I read the challenge title... well composed. |
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11/28/2005 12:43:32 AM |
| this is exactly one that I thought of doing, although I was just going to have an aspirin bottle. You executed it far better than I could have. Good job. |
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11/28/2005 12:39:34 AM |
| Valium.... derfinately not for kids... but there may be a market for it one day GOD HELP US!! fits the challenge clean interesting shot 6 |
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